Can you correct me these letter (I’m Italian) and add some suggestion about style and something else? 10 point
Dear Aspasia,
I’m sorry for the delay with I answer to your mail but now my spare time is quite limited: I’m studying a lot for the end of the school year and for my English exam.
Some days ago I found this article on “The Times”. It talk about problems that children have at school especially in English and Maths.
I remember a similar situation in my country. In fact some years ago INVALSI, a government body, starts to give to all the Italian students(especially elementary school students) some tests on the basis of their age about Maths and Italian for the sake of know their education level that doesn’t affect the finals Italian and Maths grades. Last year when I did my exam for the end of Italian middle school I did INVALSI tests about Maths and Italian with the difference that these one can affect the final grades besides control our education level.
In my opinion is very important to know at least to write and read but now, in the third millennium, we must go ahead: we must know the languages ant the use of computer at least because times are changing and the needs are changing too. A good education is the first step to have a better society and a better world. What do you think about this?
In your past letter you told me about some of your dreams and goals. They are very interesting. I completely agree with your opinion about dreams that cannot be limited.
You also told me about your consciousness in following such a career which is commonly recognised as a “men’s job” and that you are determinate to follow your dream. I agree with you and I am tired to listen to that women are the weaker sex. I absolutely don’t think so.
Woman can do the same that the men do.
I believe in the emancipation of women. I don’t believe in the stronger and weaker sex. I hate the people who beat the women, deprived of their life and their nature. Women are like men. No one is better then another.
We are in 2009 and in my opinion women can have a work, freedom of thought and freedom of speech.
But enough about that. My dream for the future are go to study and live in England and have a rewarding work. I’m still undecided about my future work.
Have you got a part-time job and a pocket money now?
Have you heard anything about the earthquake that the last night hit L’Aquila?
I live in the near region, Molise, and here we felt the biggest earth tremor. Now our school are closed to do the appropriate controls.
I am still scared. There are about 200 people dead, 1500 wounded and about a thousand of people that now haven’t nothing.
I didn’t hared about the earth’s hour on 28th of March. Defend our planet is important. In my small way I separate the household waste, I try to save energy and water. What about you?
I attach the link of the above mentioned article , the links of some of the most important English and American online dailies and the video of my favourite song.
I take the opportunity to wish you and your family a warm Easter time!
I have tried to mark changes in capital letter so they stand out. All the best!
Dear Aspasia,
I’m sorry for the delay IN ANSWERING your mail but now my spare time is quite limited; I’m studying a lot for the end of the school year and for my English exam.
Some days ago I found this article on “The Times”. It talkS about problems that children have at school especially in English and Maths.
I remember a similar situation in my country. In fact some years ago INVALSI, a government body, started to give to all the Italian students(especially elementary school students) some tests on the basis of their age in Maths and Italian for the sake of ASSESSING their education level that doesn’t affect theIR final Italian and Maths grades. Last year when I did my exam for the end of Italian middle school I did INVALSI tests IN Maths and Italian with the difference that these ones can INFLUENCE my final grades WHICH DETERMINE our education level.
In my opinion IT is very important to know at least to write and read but now, in the third millennium, we must go further: we must have OTHER LANGUAGES and the BASICS of computING at least because times are changing and the needs are changing too. A good education is the first step to have a better society and a better world. What do you think about this?
In your past letter you told me about some of your dreams and goals. They are very interesting. I completely agree with your opinion about dreams that cannot be limited.
You also told me about your ??consciousness??? [should this be 'thought'?] in following such a career which is commonly recognised as a “man’s job” and that you are determinED to follow your dream. I agree with you and I am tired OF HEARING that women are the weaker sex. I absolutely do NOT think so.
Woman can do the same that the men do. [ Better phrases as "Woman and men are equal!"]
I believe in the emancipation of women. I don’t believe in the stronger and weaker sex. I hate ['Hate' is very strong] the people who beat the women, deprived of their life and their nature. Women are like men. One is not better thAn THE other.
We are in 2009 and in my opinion women can have FREEDOM OF EMPLOYMENT, freedom of thought and freedom of speech.
But enough about that. My dream for the future are go to study and live in England and have a rewarding JOB. I’m still undecided about my future CAREER PATH.
Have you got a part-time job and pocket money now?
Have you heard anything about the earthquake that HIT L’Aquila LAST NIGHT?
I live in the nearBY region, Molise, and here we felt the biggest earth tremor. Now our schoolS are closed to do the appropriate CHECKS.
I am still scared. There are about 200 people dead, 1500 wounded and about a thousand of people that HAVE LOST EVERYTHING.
I didn’t KNOW about the earth’s hour on 28th of March. DefendING our planet is important. In my small way I separate the household waste, I try to save energy and water. What about you?
I attach the link of the above mentioned article , the links of some of the most important English and American online ??dailies?? and the video of my favourite song.
I take the opportunity to wish you and your family a warm Easter time!
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